I’m blogging at you
by tvskyle
Decided to get back to blogging. Right now the focus is going back and forth between Frog Raccoon Strawberry roughs and new MooBeard pitching. Cheggitout! http://TVsKyle.blogspot.com
Tags: frog raccoon strawberry, Kyle, moobeard
August 1st, 2009 at 12:57 pm
I’m-a check it out
August 3rd, 2009 at 7:59 am
I think MooBeard could be a good cartoon, hell I think Frog Raccoon Strawberry could be a decent animated series, if you thought out your characters and stuff a little more. To be honest I wasn’t really pleased with the short of MooBeard you had on your blog, there wasn’t a single joke, or action in the cartoon that even made me smile, and to be honest the captain is a little too universal with his sleeves if you ask me. He has anything and everything up his sleeves and in the end, it is coming off as a really cheesy “Inspector Gadget” character. Give him some hands and a standard cutlass and make him a normal pirate and I think he’d be a better character if you were ever even remotely interested in giving him any more depth then a slice of paper.
On another thought, kids like cartoons, but they don’t like just random shit either. Even stuff like Spongebob Squarepants, yeah it’s random and it’s crazy, but it still has a plot to it that you can follow from start to finish. And it has characters, each unique in their own way, each with their own unique style and personality. And they actually have a history, they have a past, episode 1 of Spongebob Squarepants introduces the character and why he even works where he does. Later episodes even have small mini arcs for other characters, places and things.
You once told me you didn’t want to bother with any sort of explanation for Strawberry or where she got the frog suit, or the power of the frog spirit. You said it was a “waste of time”. If I was a studio executive and you came into my office and pitched some sort of random ass, insane cartoon where I don’t even know what is going on half of the time and then don’t even have any answers for my questions based on the characters because it was “a waste of time to develop them”. I’d never give you a show, hell I might even cut the meeting short.
If you really, REALLY want something like Frog Raccoon Strawberry to be able to make it, then you are going to actually have to give it some thought and effort. You are going to have to define your characters and explain where they came from and why they act the way they do. Not just present us a strange and off the wall character with no explanation why.
Like the robot clone of Strawberry from the future. You just threw it at us, you never even explained why it was there. I really dislike that character, and I feel that if you had maybe given us a comic explaining where it came from and why, I’d like it a little bit better. That, and the character design for a robot clone of Strawberry looks just crummy. I feel like you just said, lets make a robot and throw some pig tales on it and call it good.
August 3rd, 2009 at 8:57 am
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bloviate
August 6th, 2009 at 3:00 am
Hehe!
August 9th, 2009 at 10:46 pm
Jeezus, that’s not what I call constructive criticism. You live, you learn - not every pitch is going to be perfect right off the bat, and he is admittedly still working on these pitches. A lot of the stuff you said could have been said in a much more concise and respectful manner, instead of saying things like, “I’d never give you a show, hell I might even cut the meeting short.” Not necessary. Try something like, “Perhaps if you expand the backstories, motivations and unique personality traits of the characters, your pitch would be more appealing to a studio.” If you phrase it that way, it might actually become useful advice. And things like, “I really dislike that character,” or, “the character design for a robot clone of Strawberry looks just crummy” - again, not necessary. Next time try, “The character could use more of an explanation,” and, “The character design of the robot clone could be strengthened” - and, if you really want to be helpful, offer a suggestion about in what way the character design could be changed. Just saying something looks “crummy” does not give any clues to what specifically is wrong with it.
That’s it for my speech, I just don’t like to see artists get needlessly beat up on when you can say something in a much more constructive and thoughtful way. If this was a real pitch meeting and you were the big exec across the table with all the money and power, I guess you could say whatever you want (it won’t make you any friends, but that’s your prerogative). However, the guy just posted a link to his blog casually on a webcomic site - this isn’t a pitch meeting. Also, Kyle: LOL @ the wiki page.
August 10th, 2009 at 5:30 am
man that cop is acting so stupidly